Film Pitch - Audience Feedback

We pitched our film to 8 people and asked them what they thought of it how we can improve on the plot of our film.

Improvements to the plot

• There needs to be more of a meaning behind why the protagonist leaves the life of crime, rather than retiring.
• To improve, we can change the character of the protagonist's sister to his wife. The wife gives him am ultimatum: it's either her or the crime business.

• There should be more action
• The henchmen should be used more e.g they should be involved in the kidnapping of the wife
• The conflict should be the result of the protagonist leaving the job, and the retaliation is the kidnapping of his wife.
• The climax of the trailer could be when the protagonist is deciding whether to go through with the heist to get his wife back.